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green showers
you let go of him
shes standing
feet to the ground
already fallen to descending night
while i was counting hours
the lights flash forward
sky flowers reaching down
wilting petals to eager eyes
decadence in darkness
sitting in the dirt
surrounded by such small attempts
at validity
swinging into tried partnerships
throwing fire to the sky
i dont belong
drawing lines in the sand
with everything illuminated
such trifling words to a page
i laid once in the pavement
my eyes hidden under blanket
and viewed a blossom
stifled awe
you know
amidst the dying beauty
ascending futility
our hearts collided with great sparks
Set the scene: tire swing, late at night, indians setting off fireworks, spinning in circles with a cd player up my shirt to keep from falling, and the notebook in my lap, scribbling sentences when I could manage the pen, listening to the Raveonettes.

It's a rush job, twenty different thoughts at once at every moment, except it's not the kind that mkaes me want to cry.
Kinda shitty but a different concept for me.
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:iconplaingreysky:
if there were twenty idea jumbled together then you tied them in together frickin sweetly.
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:iconamusantverteyeux:
WOW i love the imagery and warmth this one gives off :) you should definately publish your poetry
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:iconpoorlywritten:
Thank you.
And I've been wondering, what does your name mean? It's sounds really cool whenever I try to pronounce it...
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:iconamusantverteyeux:
your welcome, and my name means amusing green eyes :)
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:iconcrackedmem0ries:
you really need to publish girlie...
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:iconpoorlywritten:
Thank you...I've only ever gotten that from my 7th grade English teacher before. Those kind of compliments makes me feel fuzzy, thanks.
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chaps2you Jul 5, 2005   Digital Artist
It should have been titled deep nipples you ASS!
<3<3
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:iconpoorlywritten:
No, I need a title for the one I'm doing right now! Dammit! You ASS!
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chaps2you Jul 5, 2005   Digital Artist
lick my _______!
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:iconpoorlywritten:
[Naked EYEBALL]
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