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today it rained, hard and cold and making puddles everywhere
the concrete glistened maybe shone with the
wet sparkle of small pools left here
and there-- with ripples sounding
through windows, hiding in the sky
i stood on the cool set of grey
beneath frozen toes in broken shoes
and watched through curtains
of small and shiny bullets
falling from air
my eyes wandered through the scope of staircases
how they differentiate
cracks and bruises of something
supposed to be unbreakable
when i lay underneath and hope
i do not die
before fully realizing the extent
of self-imposed importance through streams of misery
but everything is grey--even
being as it is
and i can hear the sound
of tires arbitrarily sliding
over wet ground
and again i hope i do not die
suspended above them
flying away from scattered phobias
just like wet leaves on the ground
everything reminds me of my mortality
and absent faith
how i dont wish to meet fallibility with unseeing eyes
girls crying, those who think im beautiful
though i remeber now this was supposed
to be about desolate lonliness of rain drops
never reaching the curves and dips of my cold face
not a hidden fear i hide of death
seeking daggers falling
and smiling despite numb fingers in my pockets
wanting to drown in my sleep
I needed to write something new.
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PlainGreySky Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2005   Writer
you....you are so.....whats the word.....can words be ravishing?
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poorlywritten Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2005
Thank you Jill....I mmmiiiiisssssssssss you............
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PlainGreySky Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2005   Writer
then lets do something about it.........yu set a date and i'll be there...even if its 2 in the morning......
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Gothic-k Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2005   Writer
wow, it feels like it was written with deep emoution...
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poorlywritten Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2005
Thank you very much. I'm not sure if it was a deep emotion, just a fleeting thought concerning stairs and rain. Thanks for reading.
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Gothic-k Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2005   Writer
your welcome, I liked it a lot
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